Thursday, October 13, 2011
3 scary scenes
One of the scary scenes in '' halloween nightdance " was when ben's girlfriend found him hanging, it was one awful scene that i wouldn't describe it. I think micheal myers didn't care and left him burning and hanging. A second scene that was scary was when Lisa was riding the horse at the park and she saw the murderer shadow. I felt like if i experienced what lisa saw i would've had fallen down the horse. A third scene that i found scary was when marcie got stabbed in the back in front of her lover. It was very scary seeing someone innocent die slowly.
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The point of this exercise is to describe it, and make it clear why it's scary. The second scene is a good start, but needs more detail. Three scenes = three ideas = three paragraphs.
ReplyDelete7/10. You can revise for higher grade.
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ReplyDeleteOne of the scary scenes in ''Halloween Nightdance" was when Ben's girlfriend found him hanging; it was such an awful scene that I cannot describe it. I think Michael Myers didn't care and left him burning and hanging. A second scene that was scary was when Lisa was riding the horse at the park and she saw the murderer’s shadow. I felt like if I experienced what Lisa saw I would have had fallen off the horse. A third scene that I found scary was when Marcie got stabbed in the back in front of her lover. It was very scary seeing someone innocent die slowly.